Refection 3.2

The second draft of my paper doesn't differ from my first one very much. It is hard to write about such an emotional topic and I'm not to sure on what I can improve on in my first draft. I thought it was a good draft but I think I need to incorporate my sources more. I used the style of writing where I wrote a paragraph with a story then a paragraph with statistics. I'm not sure if this is the best way to get my point across but I thought it was a good idea at first. I am thinking about maybe changing it up a bit to make it sound more like a story with just some facts thrown in there. Make the flow more interesting. I still also need a scholarly source which has been hard to find but I am sure I will fid something.