Reflection 1.2

In my second draft I really tried to focus on the flow of my paper. My first draft sounded pretty choppy so I wanted the second draft to just sound better. I did that by taking out words like "another example". By doing this the transition from paragraph to paragraph sounds much better. I also tried to incorporate my sources more. I had plenty of examples in my first essay but didn't really back them up or say much about them. So in this essay I used my sources and more quotations to make my paper seem more researched than the previous essay. This makes it sounds like I know more what I am talking about, because I have done the research and now it shows in my paper. In my next draft I hope to take that even further and incorporate my sources in an even better way by making it more apparent that I really took the time to do research on this paper.