Reflection 1.1

The feedback I received from my group members was extremely helpful. It was most apparent that I need to incorporate my sources better. I have plenty of information I just need to make better use of my sources and also put some quotation s in my essay. Also there was helpful advice that the flow of my paper could be improved by leaving out “Although” and “Another example”. I think once I do this flow of my paper will be much better and it will sound more put together. In my next draft I hope to achieve better incorporation of my sources. I used my sources in this draft but I didn’t really point out where my sources came from so I want to do that. I also just want my paper to feel more put together. I think I could move sentences around or come up with new sentences entirely to do this. So far my process has just been to write everything down, whatever thoughts come to mind. Now is the time to clean it up a bit. I want to improve my conclusion paragraph as well. I think conclusions are very important because it summarizes the whole paper. I feel as though mine does not, I want the reader to read the final paragraph and completely and fully understand my paper. So I have a few things to work on, and I think I can really improve my second draft.